Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In
modern
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era, a large number of communities tend to try
alternative
medicine
than believe it to specialists.
Although
this
decade is far more developed, usual
doctors
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as
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professionals with high
education
. Both of these tendencies have their own pros and cons which will be discussed in
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essay. It cannot be denied that
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alternative
medicine
has become widely popular
due to
its
fast-effectiveness
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and diversity. Undoubtedly, it is society’s right to choose profitable and
time saving
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option
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of
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suitable treatment.
Alternative
medicine
centers
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are available for everyone, there is no need to
wait
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your doctor too long, meet the schedule of hospitals and
last
but not least, it is
affordable
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for society than experts. In that
way
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it assists
doctors
and nurses to prevent overload
,
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and keep their energy and mental health.
However
, there
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huge drawback that basically the professionals in
this
sphere
have
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not high medical
education
.
Consequently
, these procedures may be harmful
for
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health, that might affect on whole life.
For instance
, recent several years ago hijama started to be popular among people
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considered
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as
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alternative
medicine
. Masters work with
patient’s
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blood to clean it by replacing them from one organ to other.
Hence
, if
doctor
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doctors
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use
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not disinfected materials namely needles,
medicine
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gloves, it will lead to serious implications.
By contrast
, visiting usual
doctors
much
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safer and more professional as they cannot work without degree proof. So,
patient
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the patient
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can be confident that his life
on
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experts’
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the experts’
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hands who get medical/chemical
education
.
Therefore
, hospitals are controlled and provided by
government
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the government
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which
improve
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quality and enwiden opportunities as well, namely effective medications, suitable prescriptions,
right
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healing.
In addition
, in some
cases
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public hospitals provide old people with free diabetic drugs, which
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partially plays on life
expectation
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. Despite these advantages, traditional treatment is a long process to treat people completely,
while
taking medications on a daily basis for a long time
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on
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health negatively killing
immune
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slowly. All in all, despite
a
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popularity and diversity of
alternative
medicine
, usual
doctors
are
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still stays more trustworthy
due to
their
education
in anatomy, biology,
chemistry
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and chemistry
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making them
expert
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experts
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in their profession.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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