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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of immigrating to live in a foreign nation is omnipresent across the globe
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 its importance.
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 the majority of folks are in favour of
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 its number of merits, others highlight its demerits first. In my
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the benefits of living or studying in another country, the first and foremost key benefit is that students are able to acquire higher education degrees in an extremely motivating environment for learning.
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, overseas students come from all over the world to study
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UK universities, and, at the same time, to be a huge support to their fellows in the course. Another benefit which can strike the minds of the people can be in the case of working, where there would be a much higher salary offered for employees. To cite an example, the revenue of an engineer in Saudi Arabia would be doubled compared to an engineer in India. On its darker side, some of the drawbacks which make it problematic are, first
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the state of being separated from your parents, siblings, and your closest friends.
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feelings related to belonging.
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, working and living in Spain would mean that you have many rights as a human which you had not when you used to live in Iraq, but,
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, you lack a sense of belonging in your new job environment. In conclusion to the above statement,
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 its pros could be neglected nor its cons. In my opinion,
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 living or studying in a foreign country could be the dream for many people nowadays, its disadvantages should not be underestimated.
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