Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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nowadays proportion of computer consumption in
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we are unable to separate that from literacy. in
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aspects of them are far more. on the one hand, there are those who subscribe to
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highly beneficial to developing teaching with IT especially, computers. from
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huge number of students are willing to
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becoming familiar with computers and new technology
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, many commentators justifiably argue there are some drawbacks
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. from an educational perspective, they are prone to divert from
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during their tutorial.
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they notion it is disruptive of
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each student during training. in conclusion, I strongly agree its positive aspects are noticeable and
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of that are overweight.
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