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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

#computers #part #education
nowadays proportion of computer consumption in
education
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we are unable to separate that from literacy. in
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, it seems to me that
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 aspects of them are far more. on the one hand, there are those who subscribe to
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highly beneficial to developing teaching with IT especially, computers. from
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this
 phenomenon is able to improve
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 of
education
 with a wide variety of equipment,
such
 as tutorial clips. eventually, in some cases, it
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 in-person
education
 with
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 course .
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 huge number of students are willing to
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 with
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 educational assistant.
furthermore
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 becoming familiar with computers and new technology
consequently
,
this
 ability will a decisive factor for advancement in science.
on the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue there are some drawbacks
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. from an educational perspective, they are prone to divert from
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 subject during
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 type of
education
 and maybe engage pupils
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 other work.
for example
, sometimes students during study open other pages or play
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 during their tutorial.
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 they notion it is disruptive of
education
.
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 I don't find
this
 argument valid because there are several ways to protect pupils from these disadvantages by monitoring
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each student during training. in conclusion, I strongly agree its positive aspects are noticeable and
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 of that are overweight.
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