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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, social
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 is one of the
platforms
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 that people always use
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their
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 daily basis. Some
groups
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 argue that the social
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 accounts,
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 as Facebook or Twitter, have a drawbacks impact on adolescent and their ability to form personal relationships. Other
groups
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 argue that these accounts bring people together in a positive way. In my opinion, these sites bring more positive impacts
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 negative points.
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 with, new technology makes no distance between us now, which is the community can connect easily with each other from their social
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platforms
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, it affects plenty of drawbacks to personal relations.
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, young
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 prefer to choose to have a connection through their
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 rather than meet physically.
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, if the young child has not met before, the culture of working together will be hardly implemented.
On the other hand
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, social account brings many positive ways to adolescents. They can reach out to
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groups
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 which are far away from them.
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, there is no distance between the others.
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, if adolescents miss their family, when they study abroad, which is far away from their home, they can just make a call and meet their parents through
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social
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.
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, through
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social
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 accounts, we can have more friends from around the world, which brings many benefits to their life.
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, I have a friend from Canada
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 my Facebook account, which is I can make an interaction with her easily and get
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information about Canada from her, which is very beneficial for me if I have
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 plan to go there someday in the future.
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, social
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platforms
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 bring many benefits rather than drawbacks, which are very useful for adolescents' life,
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 as making a call when they
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 from their family and
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 have friends from around the world.
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