Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, social
media
is one of the
platforms
that people always use
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their
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daily basis. Some
groups
argue that the social
media
accounts,
such
as Facebook or Twitter, have a drawbacks impact on adolescent and their ability to form personal relationships. Other
groups
argue that these accounts bring people together in a positive way. In my opinion, these sites bring more positive impacts
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negative points.
To begin
with, new technology makes no distance between us now, which is the community can connect easily with each other from their social
media
platforms
.
However
, it affects plenty of drawbacks to personal relations.
Moreover
, young
groups
prefer to choose to have a connection through their
platforms
rather than meet physically.
For example
, if the young child has not met before, the culture of working together will be hardly implemented.
On the other hand
, social account brings many positive ways to adolescents. They can reach out to
the
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groups
which are far away from them.
Additionally
, there is no distance between the others.
It is clear that
, if adolescents miss their family, when they study abroad, which is far away from their home, they can just make a call and meet their parents through
the
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social
media
.
Furthermore
, through
the
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social
media
accounts, we can have more friends from around the world, which brings many benefits to their life.
For instance
, I have a friend from Canada
in
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my Facebook account, which is I can make an interaction with her easily and get
the
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information about Canada from her, which is very beneficial for me if I have
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plan to go there someday in the future.
To sum up
, social
media
platforms
bring many benefits rather than drawbacks, which are very useful for adolescents' life,
such
as making a call when they
far
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from their family and
also
have friends from around the world.
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