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Some people believe that governments should make laws about people’s nutrition and food choice while others argue that it is their choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 feel that
governments
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 should be able to create laws regarding what
people
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 eat in order to control their health. Personally, I believe
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 is a ridiculous idea, and
people
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 should be free to make their own decisions about what they do with their bodies. The following essay will discuss both sides of the issue.
To begin
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 with, there are some
people
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 who think that it is the government’s responsibility to regulate
people
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’s diets. They believe
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 would help to create a much healthier population and reduce the burdens that sickness and disease place on society. These days, the over-consumption of addictive fast
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, soft drinks, and junk
food
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 is widespread and is having vast ramifications on both
children
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 and adults’ health,
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 as obesity, diabetes, and heart disease.
This
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 is putting a great amount of pressure on healthcare systems and the economy, as
governments
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 try to deal with the associated impacts of poor diets and sedentary lifestyles. Certainly, by reducing the consumption of junk
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 and increasing the amounts of healthy
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 in
people
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’s diets, society would be much healthier and more prosperous.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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 believe that everyone should have the freedom to choose what they want to eat, and I tend to agree with
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 idea.
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, everyone is different.
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 some
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 have a tendency to put on weight and have a genetic predisposition to certain diseases, other
people
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 are able to maintain a healthy body regardless of the
food
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 they eat.
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,
people
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 have the right to
food
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 and its variations, meaning that they reserve the right to access sufficient
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,
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and feed
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 themselves adequately to meet their dietary needs.
This
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 right has come into recognition worldwide and,
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,
people
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 can and should be allowed to decide what their daily meals are like. In conclusion, I believe it is absurd to suggest that
governments
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 should control what
people
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 eat.
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, I do believe that
governments
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 should focus their efforts on restricting the advertisement and promotion of unhealthy
foods
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,
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 as fast
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 and junk
foods
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, and educate
people
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 about the negative effects these
foods
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 have on their health.
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