the two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

the two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
The two different maps give information about the changes, which have been made to the
town
of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
town
changed almost generally, including a garden and a primary
school
and some new
houses
. In 1986, there were some
houses
in the west of the
town
and near these
houses
were located two shopping stores and a post office. On the right corner of the post office was constructed a primary
school
. A bridge is located in the North and from the
North-east
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started a river, namely Stoke.
In
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The
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the
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below the
school
has a garden which has a large house and some kind of trees. Remarkable, by now, in
this
town
happened different changes, the
houses
were multiplied and
farmland
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the farmland
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demolished
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was demolished
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. There used to be a small primary
school
, but nowadays it largened. Two
shops
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shop
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stores were knocked down, but a post office and a bridge are still the same, and there was constructed a new road that was altered the way starting in the South. The main place in the
town
was
garden
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a garden
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and
this
enlarged after that started
call
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called
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Retirement home.
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