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Because so much information is available on the internet today, traditional secondary schools and teachers are no longer necessary. Do you agree with this statement?

#information #internet #schools #teachers
Nowadays the
internet
 provides a variety of
information
 for children, so it is sometimes thought that traditional schools and their
teachers
 are less important because they do have not enough knowledge compared to the
internet
 which has more
information
. In my opinion, I completely disagree that different
websites
 have more
information
 compared to school
teachers
.
Firstly
, I would like to mention one major point why I oppose
this
 statement is that the
information
that is
 available for pupils on the
Internet
 is not 100% correct.
Moreover
, that
information
 is incomplete. To illustrate
this
, I came across one educational website and I found that it gave wrong solutions to some maths problems.
Nevertheless
, the
Internet
 has some basic advantages, I believe that schools are the best place to study and learn new things. They have their style to teach
students
 and it is really helpful for them shortly.
Additionally
, currently, on the
internet
, there are a couple of
websites
 available and it is tough for
students
 to trust any one of them because all are very attractive and have good reviews.
For example
, I have received feedback from some
students
 that they have enjoyed gaining knowledge from all
websites
. After some time, I asked about exam results, and they were very nervous about their results.
Hence
,
according to
 me, the method of study given by
teachers
 is correct because they had already gone through those
websites
 and collected useful words from them. In conclusion, in recent years, the
internet
 has become a more useful medium for
students
 to get
information
. But, I believe that that
information
 is wrong and not in the correct manner. Schools and
teachers
 are the only sources of correct
information
.
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