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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend to you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#country #language
Language
 barriers are the most noticeable
one
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when it comes to learning other languages. Align with that, using a non-native
language
 as part of our necessity as
a
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human
being
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 could contribute to either social
problems
 or practical
problems
. In my point of view, I do really agree that speaking a foreign
language
 in a country can lead to some serious social
problems
 and practical
problems
 as well. Generally speaking, languages are necessary to convey
the
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information through communication.
However
, when the
language
 is not familiar enough
with
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 the citizens around that area, it could be hard for citizens to absorb that information whatever the good quality of
communicator
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the communicator
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 is. As a clear illustration, My friends
have
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visited a traditional market in Merauke, one of
western
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 areas
in
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 Indonesia to buy something. At
first,
the sellers did not really understand what items they wanted to buy because they used Indonesian. After they have lots of conversations, somebody comes to us to buy something from the sellers
as well as
 help us to give more depth of explanation to the retailers.
Otherwise
, some people seem to neglect that opinion because they think that
language
 barriers that are constructed by communication could make citizens more adaptive to
know
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 about other languages and become fluent as well. That means society could more easily get
along with
 strangers that come from different regions or countries. That can lead to a good economy and the employment rate will increase. All in all, from my point of view, social
problems
 and practical
problems
 are significant effects that can be caused significantly by the usage of speaking
non-native
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language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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