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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too mcuh time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, many people claimed that education in school spent too much time learning knowledge and focusing on studying facts than other
skills
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. I strongly believe that they make students in all grades lack
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life
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. For some
reasons
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:
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, spending too much time on academic subjects leads to
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 lack of soft
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 so has an obstacle to
find
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 a stable job.
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, if you want to become a doctor, you need much knowledge but
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 you will need practical
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or
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when you want to be a teacher, you not only need theory,
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also
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 need to have communication
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 to communicate with your students.
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, even job seekers have college degrees with
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 but still fail. Because, nowadays, many companies need official staff to have practical experience. That’s why a lot of people have degrees but are still unemployed. In conclusion, studying facts is necessary but you shouldn’t spend all your time
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 that. We need to add more practical
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 in education, balancing both of them to help students have more
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 in social
skills
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