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The younger generation is mainly responsible for the latest technological developments. How far do you agree?

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Technology
 plays an important role in
today
's younger
generation
 and they have contributed the most to recent modifications. In my opinion,
today
's kids play a vital role in the development of
such
technology
. The
generation
 born
today
 is living in a digital world and it is impossible for them to stay away from
technology
 as it could misguide them. The dependency on electronic devices to access information
that
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led to several technological advancements.
For instance
, social media platforms like Facebook were developed by Mark Zuckerberg when he was only 19 years old.
Similarly
, Instagram
,
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 and YouTube channels have progressed enormously which helps people connect. Children
today
 are displaying their talents on social platforms marketing their skills which helps them connect with people from different parts of the world. With
such
, advancements everybody is constantly contributing to developing websites, and reaching out to the world with their contributions like in gaming, developing apps, and user-friendly portals.
However
,
while
 the older
generation
 has set a solid foundation for these developments the younger ones are keen and very dependent on
technology
.
Furthermore
, developments in artificial intelligence have made
today
's
generation
 lazy and in isolation and lack social skills. The older
generation
 is not very dependent on
technology
 as the
generation
today
.
To conclude
,
technology
 has impacted the minds of young people for the good and the bad. Though the dependency has increased it is important to limit the usage of
technology
.
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