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The process below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below. Write at least 150 words.

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the diagram illustrates the process by which drinking
water
 is produced by a solar-powered
water
 pump and
water
 filter.
overall
, it can be seen that the process requires 7 stages in total. it starts when sunlight is absorbed by a solar panel from the sun and culminates with drinking
water
 being moved to a moveable container for consumption after the procedure of filtering and pumping. looking
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 solar panel is utilized to absorb sunlight from the sun, which is
then
 transmitted to a converter to form electricity. afterwards, it is delivered to a pump, which is located in an underground well.
subsequently
,
water
 is moved through a pipe into a
water
 tank
that is
 placed on a wooden platform. the process continues with
water
 being filtered by a machine before is transmitted through a pipe to a tap.
finally
, the drinking
water
 is delivered to a movable container for the purpose of consumption.
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