Task 2: The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
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golden age of the Internet, it is understandable that more and more users prefer virtual communication through social networking sites to
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real
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. In my opinion, I believe that the drawbacks resulting from
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trend outweigh its benefits. On the
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hand, using social media can help
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gain social advantages. First of all, there has been a tendency to live as a nuclear family so that
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may have fewer opportunities to keep in touch with their relatives.
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from several social networking sites these days can handle
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problem, it enables them to maintain interactions with their families and friends, especially the scattered ones.
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, a large number of fellows having similar interests can be connected through the Internet regardless of geographical
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, which benefits users by creating more new relationships and expanding their social circle.
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, these merits mentioned above
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have some limitations and I suppose that they are outweighed by more adverse impacts. In terms of social interaction, communicating virtually
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of directly may lessen
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's chances of developing
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interpersonal skills. Even though
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already have had screen-to-screen conversations, it is still different to act with other
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and react to how other
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are acting when dealing with
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interaction.
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, the Internet's
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may be at a cost of privacy
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the rapid growth of cybercrime.
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, users can get their personal information stolen by hackers /get stolen their personal information by hackers/, especially financial market
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one
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, or become victims of online scammers. In conclusion, the use of social media addresses some positive aspects
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the convenience of communication.
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, from my perspective, the disadvantages of
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replacement for face-to-face interaction are more considerable than its advantages
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of social and financial elements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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