some people believe that is best to accept a bad situation such as unsatisfactorty job or shoratage of money,others argue that is better to try and imrove such situation
Many people, all around the world, experienced bad situations. Some believe that we must accept those things
such
as do not have a satisfaction
job. Others do not agree with Replace the word
satisfying
this
point of view and argue that it is better to try hard and change the situation. We will discuss both in the following essay. On the one hand, many think that their life is destiny as written in the past and no one can change it. In important areas namely their career, shortage of money and even where they live. If they are not happy with their profession, they will accept it and not think about changing it. Or if
their income is not enough for their family, they will not ask for help from others. They will accept it and Correct word choice
If
would
not try to shift things. Wrong verb form
will
On the other hand
, there are many people who are trying hard to switch
their lives and will not accept less or bad. Verb problem
change
For example
, someone who does not have a good job, try to find another one that would like more and satisfy him/her. People like this
try hard to take some good actions that might change their way of living. In conclusion, I cannot accept the first group's opinion and I believe that we write our stories by hard-working and do
some changes that make us happy in our lives.Verb problem
make
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite