The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000
The graph compares variations in
birth
rates of two countries (
China
and
United
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the United
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States of America) from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
birth
rates of the two countries fluctuated, but
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China`s
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china
`s
birth
rate
remained steady in the end.
According to
the data,
American
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the American
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birth
rate
started above 10 in 1920 and decreased sharply from 1930 to 1945 but it experienced a
dramatically
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increase, continuously in 1955 the
birth
rate
was approximately 50
while
at the end
due to
slight
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a slight
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decrease in the
,
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trend it was just over 5. As it is given
china
's trend differed from 1955, the pick for it was in 1950 after a sharp increase the
birth
rate
was 20.
while
it declined gradually after 1950 there was just less than 5 which is the lowest
rate
among the two countries.There was saw a sharp decline in the amount of
birth
from 1955 to 200. The figure for
birth
in
China
and the USA in 2000 were 3 and 7 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, china, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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