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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Due to
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 globalization, countries inevitably exchange their national
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, which leads to having comparable products on the market. I tend to believe that
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 process is advantageous in terms of
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 variety
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 travellers facing less cultural shock during their journeys.
To begin
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 with, import gives access to virtually any type of
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, even if it is grown thousands of miles away.
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, local supermarket chains are able to sell a wide range of goods, from exotic fruit and vegetables to meat from animals which live only in certain areas of the globe.
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, it gives individuals
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 restaurants a chance to introduce new culinary masterpieces by virtue of experimenting with ingredients and recipes.
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 enables nations all over the world to try new tastes they would
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 miss.
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, the risk of going down with
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 poisoning
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 travelling has become much lower. Having arrived in a foreign country, a tourist is less likely to be stressed about what to eat, since he or she is already accustomed to the
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 consumed there. For those who prefer to eat their national dishes, it is
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 quite easy to find the same type of
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 in almost any country they attend.
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, some districts in cities are home to a large number of
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 chains offering an international menu.
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,
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 industries become alike by means of adopting a variety of
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 from other territories, I still hold the view that we should not limit ourselves to
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 grown locally. Having diversified cuisine will give us a chance to experience new flavours and definitely simplify the lives of travellers going abroad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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