The two maps show the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010
The two maps depict the motorable routes which lead to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Analyzing the diagram from an
overall
point of view, the main road access and the health facility remain untouched in both years. In comparison, additional features were constructed Linking Words
whereas
others were demolished in the latter year.
To commence with, the ring road boarded at the north of the clinic, the hospital and the city boulevard at the south were the same in 2007 and 2010. Linking Words
However
, three roundabouts were built in 2010. One at the T-junction of the ring and hospital highway, the second on the city route and the Linking Words
last
at the outskirts of the main health centre's drive access.
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Furthermore
, the parking space which was occupied by both the public and staff in 2007, was solely used by staff in 2010 whiles a new parking lot was put up, east of the hospital designated for only public use. Linking Words
Moreover
, in the 2010 layout, a bus station has been constructed adjacent to the hospital driveway and has been connected to the two roundabouts. Linking Words
Finally
,the bus stops which were formerly along the clinic highway have been completely demolished.Linking Words
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