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One of the most pressing problems facing the world today is overpopulation. What policies do you think governments should adopt to address the causes and effects of this problem? write at least 250 words and please give relvent example or experiance on your own

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Nowadays the common problem that faces many of the major biggest cities in the world is crowded jam-packed capitals cities which are going beyond the control in regards to all aspects.
therefore
 if authorities should have a proper plan in place to solve
this
 issue.
this
 will create extent negative impact on our society sooner or later.In
this
 essay,I will argue that if the government does not implement the below rules and regulations most of the cities will be overcrowded and will go beyond our control.
Firstly
 governments should think that using all habitable lands and developing with all benefits for the
people
 and should encourage them to live on the land which is not in use currently,and
this
 will create a big impact as
people
 will spread all over the country
instead
 of one specific place.
However
, to implement
this
 governments should fund those projects immensely but the outcome will be invaluable.
For example
, the Hongkong is one of the major overcrowded countries in the world but their government came up with
this
 amazing idea and they developed all very rural areas and give their residents the to relocate to these newly introduced areas to overcome
this
 situation.
on the other hand
, if there is not enough land in their country the only option we can think about is controlling the birth rate,
for instance
, the china is only country which is
following
this
 rule strictly as they make a strict rule that one-child policy,meaning
people
 are allowed to have only one child in their lifetime which is most of the
people
 believe that including my self
this
 is inhuman. in conclusion, I strongly believe that all the crowded countries should take place on these policies to overcome
this
 situation at least for a period of time.
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