In many countries tradition of having family meals together is disappearing. Why is this happening? Wha will the effects of this be on the family and society?

Nowadays,
majority
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of people do not tend to get together for family meals in many countries.
This
approach
also
is supported by
parents
and
childs
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children
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. There were reasons
which
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based
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were based
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on the daily routine of
parents
and other
members
of
family
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the family
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. In
this
case, some troubles may be faced in the future regarding the
realtionship
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relationship
among the
members
of
family
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the family
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.
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, both
of
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parents
prefer to work
fully
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time
due to
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the capitalism
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capitalism
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regime. In
this
,
situation
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the
children
have to spend
time
more
nannies
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with nannies
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, teachers,
witm
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with
himself
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apply
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or
herself
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themselves
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than their
parents
.
Subsequnetly
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Subsequently
this
situation,
children
get used to being alone. Turning to the
parents
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parent's
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behaviour, it
seem
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more
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a more
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easy way that
children
can control themselves regardless
their
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of their
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control.
This
approach impact
also
the
time
of
family
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the family
a family
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meal
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meals
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. Many families can no longer eat the meal together.
Eash
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Each
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single
members
of
parents
prefer to have
meal
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a meal
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in
suitable
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a suitable
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time
for themselves.
For
instance
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,instance
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it is proved by the
Pshycology
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Psychology
University survey, the amount of to have
meal
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a meal
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together was just its 35 % among
family
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the family
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which majority of
members
work
due to
busy routine.
On the other hand
,
the
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society will face some torrent of problems regarding
communications
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communication
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between
family
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families
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. To enhance closeness between parent and
children
signfy
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signify
that the
children
will
unaccustamed
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unaccustomed
accustomed
to less dependency on
parents
in early aged. After that, many
parents
will have no idea how
spend
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to spend
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time
their
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with their
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children
. The
children
can join
the
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gangs or other communities which have bad habits. In fact,
due to
statistics
of
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Ministry
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the Ministry
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of State of
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the
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most
of
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children
who are addicted
drug
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has less closeness and control by their
parents
. İn conclusion,
to spend
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spending
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time
together on
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a meal
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meal
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meals
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even affects the
life style
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lifestyle
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of
the
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children
in
positive
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a positive
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way.
Parents
should consider
to contact with
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contacting
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their
children
and other
members
of the family.
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