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Some people say that every human being can create art. Others think only people with the ability can create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #art #ability
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It is thought
by
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some
people
 that every individual are being able to create
art
while
 others assert that only gifted ones can
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. Many
people
 may improve themselves to do some
art
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works
, though it needs time. Looking
to
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this
 suggestion from the other side, creating a considerable
art work
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 needs innate talent in order to be distinct. On the one hand, it is no doubt that
people
 can create
art
 with sufficient experience and work.
Although
 it is not easy to learn and perform in a short span, enthusiasts can improve their skills and creativity eventually. In the end, if it is possible
from
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 them, they may open exhibitions for showing their
works
 to experts. To illustrate that, some individuals display their
arts
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 via web sources and they are praised by communities even though they are not entitled as artists. Shortly, every person can do artistic
works
 because today’s world and
people
 are more dimensioned to interpret and evaluate these
works
.
On the other hand
, since ancient times, most
of
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significant
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art
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artworks
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works
 have
performed
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 by gifted
people
. Even though many individuals have been eager to create
art
, only a portion of
people
’s
works
have
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 been entitled as
an
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art
due to
 their distinguishable features. They have created substantial, timeless and ultimate
works
 because these
individual’s
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 point of view and implementation differs from others.
For instance
, DaVinci’s portraits and inventions are still inspired by new artists.
Thus
, these
works
 are entitled as
art
 and their performers are entitled as
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artist
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.
As a result
, untalented individuals cannot interpret
world
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 to make
an
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art
 but understand it to make a craft. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
 discussion. Even though, every person has
a
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 skill to create
an
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art
, in my opinion, most of them would be evaluated as craft rather than
art
. Real artists should be equipped with talent, logic and reformist thoughts. 47 dk.
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