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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The plans illustrate the Southwest
airport's
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Airport's
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 site before and after the refurbishment which will be done in the next year.
It is clear that
 lots of features
such
 as ATM and Sky train will be added to the site,
however
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 some parts are not going to see a change like security and Passport control. First of all,
walkway
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the walkway
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 will be substituted with
Sky
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the Sky
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 train and the shops
which
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apply
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will be added to the vacant area between the security and Sky train.
In
addition
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 a Bag drop,
and
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apply
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an ATM and a car hire will be added to the site. The number of Cafe, arrival and departure doors will be doubled.
Furthermore
, the number of
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the gate
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gate
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gates
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 will be increased from 10 to 18.
On the other hand
, the
Check-in's
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Check-in
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 location will be changed to the opposite corner
while
 customs , security and passport control will not see any change during the refurbishment in the next year.
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