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Human activities has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. some people believe this cannot be changed while others feel that we can still take action to protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Human beings have had a damaging impact on the
environment
 and on all living things on our planet in
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of public opinion on helping or not helping to protect the
environment
further
.
firstly
, I will discuss why
people
 feel they can no longer help living things and their local
environment
 and
secondly
, I will explore what action
people
 are taking to benefit the natural world. Many
people
 feel that they can no longer help the
environment
due to
 rapidly developing economies. many of these countries that are becoming industrialised rely on factories to produce and create goods.
For example
, many Asian countries produce many goods for the West, which in turn creates pollution but
also
 jobs for poorer
people
. another reason
people
 feel helpless to help the Earth is
due to
 rising population levels it is difficult to say whether we can sustain
such
 huge numbers of
people
 on our planet. It takes a lot of
energy
 to produce food, and it may be that we are already too highly populated to feed everyone.
On the other hand
, many others think that we are still capable of helping the Earth. One of the main reasons for
this
 thought is using solar
energy
. Solar
energy
 is renewable and reliable
energy
 that does not harm the
environment
 in any shape or form.
For instance
, Yemen started using some power 10 years ago and it has been quite beneficial for both
people
 and nature.
moreover
, I think that we can still rescue our climate by banning plastic bags, when
people
 often use plastic bags it can be very harmful to the living surroundings. In the past several
years'
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 India has managed to ban plastic bags, and in ,turn
this
 contributed to a better climate and more healthy nature. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 we are facing many challenges in protecting the
environment
 in our modern world. in my opinion, I feel strongly about ensuring the safety and well-being of our planet
,
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 and view that the government worldwide should make
this
 their top priority.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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