Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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The consumption of high levels of
sugar
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has been linked to
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problems, including obesity, type 2 diabetes and heart disease.
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, some people argue that making sugary
products
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more expensive could be an effective way to encourage people to consume less
sugar
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. In my opinion,
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strategy is understandable and could be effective enough to improve public
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, but there are other efficient alternatives as well. On the one hand, there
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some evidence that
price
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can influence consumer behaviour.
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, studies show that increasing the
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of sugary drinks can lead to reduced consumption. In fact, in Mexico, a new tax on sugary drinks was introduced in 2014 and the total consumption decreased by 12% in the first year. There are more countries, including France and the UK, where
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taxes
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have been implemented over the past ten years.
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, extra
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on sugary
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add more burden to low-income groups.
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,
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is an essential nutrient for human bodies to generate energy quickly on a daily basis. If all sugary
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were increased in
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by governments, low-income households would suffer from malnutrition, which leads to another
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issue.
Instead
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of
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taxes
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, providing education and awareness campaigns about the
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risks associated with a
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sugar
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and high-fat diet.
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can be done through schools and community
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.
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, encouraging physical activities through community initiatives
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as walking or cycling groups, sports teams, and other activities can help promote a more active lifestyle. In conclusion,
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taxes
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or increased
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price
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of sugary
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are
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of
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the options to reduce
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intake, but I believe that other ways,
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as education and
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lifestyle, would be more beneficial to everyone, regardless of social status.
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