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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure.

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure.
The figure below illustrates the secondary/ high school
teachers
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income
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over
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 five different countries in 2009.
Overall
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,
while
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 the Luxembourg
teachers
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 seemed to have the highest
salaries
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 , the ones in
Australia
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 achieved the lowest over
times
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.
To begin
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 with, as we can see,
teachers
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 in Luxembourg were the ones receiving the most dreaming
income
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, starting with 80,000 dollars, which
was
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nearly tripled the
salaries
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 of the
teachers
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 in
Australia
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 and was about two times higher than the
teachers
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'
salaries
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 in other countries. The most dramatic increase in
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income
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 was in
Australia
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 and Japan. For the 15-year-experience
teachers
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, the
income
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 would be doubled in the comparison with the salary in the beginning.
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, the Denmark and
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Australia
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teachers
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 tended to reach the best salary for the shortest time, 8 and 9 years, respectively,
while
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 the
teachers
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 in other nations had to spend over 30 years to earn the top
salaries
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, income, salaries, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salaries
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • global differences
  • economic disparities
  • valuation
  • compensation
  • socio-economic status
  • investment in education
  • regional similarities
  • living costs
  • government funding
  • qualification requirements
  • demand for teachers
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