The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2025

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The bar graph illustrates the value of the southland's main exports in the area of international

tourism

Dairy

product

and

meat

product

in 2000,

2023

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and 2023

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and future predictions for The year 2025.

Overall

we can observe that International

tourism

is always

being

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apply

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the maximum in the sector of

tourism

whereas

meat

products

may decrease for the year 2025. International

tourism

shows the highest increasing trend

that is

in 2000, it continues to increase till now i.e about 9

billion

and forecasted that it probably rise around 10

billion

in 2025. The exports of

dairy

products

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are

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highest

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the highest

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till now

that is

billion

but in 2000 the export

for

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dairy

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the dairy

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product

is too low, the figure lies

around

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at around

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billion

and it is manifested that in future 2025

The

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apply

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dairy

product

export will drop to 8

billion

. Moving on

meat

products

shows a downward trend,

whereas

a maximum of 6

billion

meat

products

were exported in 2000, but row it declined to 5•5

billion

and it is projected that till 2025 the value will decrease to around 5

billion

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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2025

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