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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2025

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2025
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The bar graph illustrates the value of the southland's main exports in the area of international
tourism
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,
Dairy
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product
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 and
meat
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product
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 in 2000,
2023
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and 2023
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 and future predictions for The year 2025.
Overall
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 we can observe that International
tourism
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 is always
being
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the maximum in the sector of
tourism
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,
whereas
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meat
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products
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 may decrease for the year 2025. International
tourism
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 shows the highest increasing trend
that is
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 in 2000, it continues to increase till now i.e about 9
billion
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 and forecasted that it probably rise around 10
billion
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 in 2025. The exports of
dairy
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products
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is
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are
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highest
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the highest
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 till now
that is
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 10
billion
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 but in 2000 the export
for
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of
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dairy
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the dairy
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product
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 is too low, the figure lies
around
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at around
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 7
billion
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 and it is manifested that in future 2025
The
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apply
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dairy
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product
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 export will drop to 8
billion
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. Moving on
meat
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products
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 shows a downward trend,
whereas
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 a maximum of 6
billion
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meat
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products
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 were exported in 2000, but row it declined to 5•5
billion
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 and it is projected that till 2025 the value will decrease to around 5
billion
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, whereas".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, dairy, product, meat, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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