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Some people think nations and individuals should focus on their own personal problems rather than global ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #nations #individuals #focus #ones
Nowadays, it is sometimes thought that countries and humans ought to focus on global
problems
,
while
 other
people
 believe that the focus should be on personal
problems
. In my opinion, I totally agree
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that folks should
be
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concentrate on their own difficulties rather than global issues.
Firstly
, I would like to make
concentrate
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a concentrate
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 on one problem
that is
 not focused.
From
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last
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 couple of years, students are going
to
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abroad for higher education and for better
carrer
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career
 growth. The reason why pupils are migrating to another country is that it feels them a chance to improve themselves.
For instance
, the
indian
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people
 are still going to
the
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Canada or the
U.S
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U.S.
 for higher education. So,
according to
 me, if
country
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improve
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 their education system
then
 it might be possible that students will enjoy
to learn
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 more and
earn
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 more in their own country.
Secondly
, another point to
be consider
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 is that individuals have
same
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thought
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 as nations.
People
 always talk about their neighbourhood's
problem
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problems
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 and give them
a free solutions
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 without thinking
whether
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 it was right or wrong. During
this
, they can not figure out
problems
 that are
happened
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 in their own home.
For example
, some families always try to make happy to their neighbourhood and at the same
time
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 their child is becoming far from them because they
he
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feel alone.
Hence
, I think that if families are staying
together
with
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happily
than
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then
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 little younger are not becoming alone. In conclusion, today's community and generations are less
concentrating
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 on their own issues, and they are talking about solutions
of
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 other
problems
.
Accroding
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According
 to
me
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,
people
 and local regions first focus on personal
problems
 and think
how
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about how
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 to solve them.
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