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Some people think that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the fuel resources in the world. To what extent do you agree?

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In the past,
air
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travel
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 was just a dream for many.
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, 2 brothers, called the Right brothers, made that into a reality. Since the invention of modern aeroplanes, there have been many questions about the pollution it causes
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 using up the fuel resources in the world and if
air
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travel
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 should be restricted. I believe that
air
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travel
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 should not be restricted.
One
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 of the biggest advantages of
air
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travel
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 is the ability to
travel
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 across the world from a few hours to a few days depending on the flight path. In the past, a journey from
one
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 country to another would take at least a few days to weeks by land or sea.
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 now , we can hop on an aeroplane and visit friends,
family
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and family
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 and even go on a hassle-free vacation.
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, If
one
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 of your family members is hospitalized and they are in another country,
air
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travel
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 would be the fastest way to reach that family member.
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,
air
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travel
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 is the most efficient way of travelling long distances.
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, another advantage of
air
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travel
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 is that travelling by
air
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 is
one
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 of the safest ways to
travel
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. Did you know that you have a higher chance of dying by falling down from your bed as compared to travelling on an aeroplane? People have
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 sense of security when they are on a plane
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 the airline company puts the customer's safety
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. In conclusion,
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 there are pros and cons to
air
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travel
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, the pros outweigh the cons
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