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In many parts of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a new born child while the other works full-time to earn money. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In
this
 modern era,
parents
 are more flexible to do some activities, apart from raising their
children
, they could
also
 work to earn money. By doing those responsibilities, there are some advantages and disadvantages which would emerge. I will discuss it in
this
 essay. The first benefit of having a job
while
 taking care
children
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of children
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 is
parents
 could monitor their
children
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children's
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 anytime
due to
around
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 them.
Therefore
, the
parents
 could serve their
children
for
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their needs,
such
 as
give
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foods
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food
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 or
replace
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 diapers, which make all those activities in
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the parents
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parents
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parents'
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 control;
therefore
, they are not concerned about their
children
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children's
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 condition.
In addition
, having
a
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children
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children
 certainly has many needs;
therefore
,
parents
 would not be
worry
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 about fulfilling them.
This
 would make
children
growth
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 well
due to
 the good treatment from
parents
. Turning to
downsides
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 of
this
, there are some moments in working that make people
being
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hurry. In
this
 case,
parents
 who have
the
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moments,
such
 as
deadline
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deadlines
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,
rejection
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and rejection
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 would bring them to be unhappy.
As a result
,
this
 situation could affect their feeling and their concentration to take care
their
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children
 and
got
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 neglected
from
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by
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parents
.
Moreover
, having a full-time job could not be done
along with
 other important
responsibility
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responsibilities
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,
such
 as raising
children
. It is because they must choose which one to be prioritized. In conclusion,
Parents
 could control
to
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their
children
although
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while
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 working.
However
,
children
 would be possibly neglected
from
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by
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 their
parents
 if there is a negative from work.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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