The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
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diagram illustrates information about the process of
sugar
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and how it is produced by the
cane
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.
Firstly
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, canes need to grow up for 12 to 18 months, only
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harvested by people or machines.
Secondly
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, the special machine crushes
sugar
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cane
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into
juice
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, and
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the
juice
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will purify by a limestone filter.
Thirdly
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, purifying
juice
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will become syrup by heating, after that separating
sugar
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crystals from the syrup.
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,
sugar
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crystals are through dring and cooling so that we can gain
sugar
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which we see every day.
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, there are seven steps to produce
sugar
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from
cane
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including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying
juice
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, evaporating, centrifuging, drying and cooling. The process is beginning with the
cane
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growing and end with drying and cooling.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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