The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts
gives
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data about the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.There are five powers.They are
hydropower
,
oil
,
nucleat
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nuclear
power , coal and
nafural
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natural
gas. Looking at the graph as a whole,
oil
was the most
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energy between 1980 and 2003.
On the other hand
,
hydropower
was the lowest from 1983 to 2003. In detail,
hydropower
was no change at 4%
this
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priode
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period
, and
also
nuclear power remained all most constant at around 22% from 1983 to 2003.
On the other hand
, the proportion of coal
decrease
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at
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10% between 1983 and 2003,
then
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and then
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the rate of
hydropower
down
at
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4% from 1983 to 2003.In constant,the proportion of natural gas
increase
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increased
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at
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by
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10% until 2003.As you can see,
the
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oil
is the most
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in
the
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all,and
also
the
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hydropower
is the
proporption
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proportion
of lowest in
the
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all.So the rate of
hydropower
and
oil
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was different
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different
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differed
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at around 36% in 1983 and 2003.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hydropower, oil with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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