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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts
gives
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 data about the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.There are five powers.They are
hydropower
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,
oil
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,
nucleat
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nuclear
 power , coal and
nafural
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natural
 gas. Looking at the graph as a whole,
oil
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 was the most
use
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 energy between 1980 and 2003.
On the other hand
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,
hydropower
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 was the lowest from 1983 to 2003. In detail,
hydropower
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 was no change at 4%
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this
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priode
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period
, and
also
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 nuclear power remained all most constant at around 22% from 1983 to 2003.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of coal
decrease
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at
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by
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 10% between 1983 and 2003,
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then
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and then
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 the rate of
hydropower
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 down
at
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to
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 4% from 1983 to 2003.In constant,the proportion of natural gas
increase
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increased
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at
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by
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 10% until 2003.As you can see,
the
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apply
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oil
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 is the most
use
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used
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 in
the
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apply
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all,and
also
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the
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apply
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hydropower
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 is the
proporption
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proportion
 of lowest in
the
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apply
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all.So the rate of
hydropower
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 and
oil
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was different
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different
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differed
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 at around 36% in 1983 and 2003.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hydropower, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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