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In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct

#world #work #risk #mistakes
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Some people claim that working quickly and making risky
errors
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 is better than working slowly and checking the accuracy of the
work
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,
while
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 others believe the opposite. Personally, I think that working
in
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at
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 a slow pace but without risky
mistakes
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 is the best. I feel
this
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 way for several reasons, and I am going to explain my view in the following paragraphs. First of all, accuracy is always essential at the
work
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. If we make risky
mistakes
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 why do we study at the university? I think one of the main reasons
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of
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 attending
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the
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university is to avoid making
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the
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work
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. People always should check their
errors
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 so that they will not repeat them
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.
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, we should not make
mistakes
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 in order to do our tasks fast.
Next,
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your
boss
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 might consider that you always make
mistakes
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. A person who makes risky
errors
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 despite his hard
work
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 is considered
as
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a person who does not know his
work
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. My friend's experience is a compelling example of
this
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. When my friend worked as an accountant at
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one of the famous companies in my city, he made a
lot
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mistakes
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 in order to
work
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 fast.
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, it resulted that the company
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 its tax less, and it influenced
to
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all other finance
documentations
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. After that her
boss
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 found out that was happened
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 my friend’s mistake,
he
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 changed her position and never trusted her again. Have not
she
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worked hastily, she would not make huge
mistakes
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 and her
boss
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 would not lose his trust in her.
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, correcting
errors
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 takes time. Some people
work
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 fast without paying attention to their
errors
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, and that can have
effect
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an effect
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 on a company thoroughly. Directors might invite specialists to find the
errors
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where
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 workers make, so
this
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 will take time and sometimes will impact
on
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the
companies’
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company’s
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 reputation in a negative way.
To conclude
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, working slowly but productively is always the best.
This
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 is because accuracy is the most important when it relates to working, correcting
errors
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 takes extra time, and your
boss
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 will have
negative
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 impression
about
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 you if you make risky
errors
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.
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