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Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is reported that a
lot
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 of
students
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 have part-time jobs. The main advantage is the opportunity to get useful experience,
while
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 a possible downside would be problems at
school
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 because a
job
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 may take a
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 of power and time. On the one hand, a part-time
job
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 will teach
students
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 to be responsible. Obviously, a majority of
people
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 want to have a good
job
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 in the
future
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, but it is almost impossible without
work
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 experience. It is known that companies prefer workers with
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 experience
instead
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 of
people
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 without any background.
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, a part-time
job
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 is a good way to start earn own money and realise how to spend it in the best way.
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, most of the
people
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 who started to
work
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 at a high
school
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 have a higher salary in
future
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 than
people
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 who did not have
work
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 during their
school
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 years.
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, a part-time
job
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 may take the time that might be needed for study processes.
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, a
lot
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 of
students
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 might lose their attention to studying and get bad marks in
school
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.
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, a
lot
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 of high
school
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students
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 in Russia have part-time jobs because their families do not have enough money for
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 education. Sadly, It is known that not all of them can take their exams well because they miss some courses from their part-time jobs.
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, the benefits of a part-time
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 are a good
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future
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, but a drawback is
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 possibility to waste time that might be useful for exams and for the
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