The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
A graph displayed an increase in tourism to a specific
island
in the Carribeans between 2010 and 2017. The line graphs compared those who visited on cruise ships with others who stayed on the island
.
Overall
, the destination enjoyed a significant upward trend in its tourism during a seven year
period. Both, the total numbers of people, and those coming by boat increased three times and quadrupled respectively. Those preferring to stay on the Add a hyphen
seven-year
island
itself remained relatively stable.
As mentioned, visitors who journeyed on cruises saw a steep and steady rise after 2012 which was the trough of the curve with 0.2 million
. After that, the graph markedly rose till its peak at the end
of the documented period in 2017 to 2 million
. Likewise
, the overall
statistic had its sharpest upward movement after 2012, levelling off for one year between 2015 and 2016 before skyrocketing to 3.5 million
people. This
respresents
an astronomical 350% increase.
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represents
In contrast
to this
, travellers staying on the island
had a short but sharp climb for one year before levelling off to a steady state for three years at around 1.5 million
. Between 2015 and 2016 numbers decreased slightly but were on the rise again for
2017.Change preposition
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