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The spend of multinational companies and the resulting increase in globalization produce positive effects for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, the discourse surrounding cross-national corporations and the accelerated process of
globalization
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 remains a topic of great interest.
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 some individuals champion the notion which can be seen as anti-
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, I am
nevertheless
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 more inclined to endorse the perspective that
globalization
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 is a blessing for most people. There
seems
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 to be reasons why anti-
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 is assumed reasonable by some people. Those who think in
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 way may point to legions of disadvantages of multinational companies and the increase of
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,
such
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 as the destruction of traditional industry in some districts, some problems
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 in the supervision of companies
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doing business in many countries, and abnormal industry structure in developed nations.
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, some recent anti-
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 parades all over the world
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 provided evidence
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 their opinion. Plausible though it seems, it is difficult for me to ignore the advantages
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this
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 trend.
To begin
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 with, cross-nation corporations will definitely be beneficial to the economic development of developing countries, because
it
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they
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 can offer more jobs to individuals living in these nations, which
thus
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 increases their income. Meanwhile, globalized businesses are able to make full use of
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 endowments of each country.
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, productivity will rise, and the prices of some products will decrease.
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,
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 can make global connectivity closer and
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 promote global integration.
This
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 will lead us towards a better world. In conclusion, I remain resolutely convinced that
globalization
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 dominated by multinational companies needs to continue to be promoted for the benefit of all nations involved.
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 there may be some drawbacks behind it, the reasons I presented above thoroughly support my stance.
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