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The maps show the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate changes
of
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Pebbleton
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 between now and 20 years ago. It is true that
citizens
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the citizens
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 of
Pebbleton
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 are much more
social
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socially
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 and physically active now.
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, the south of
Pebbleton
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 has not
been
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changed compared to the north of the city. Housing numbers have been improved and facilities have been developed.
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 the only change in the south is the new bridge called Footbridge which
provide
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 a new route to the city centre. The school, Coast Road and green infrastructure have been provided
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their
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the
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 same locations for 20 years. New tennis courts have been built beside Lighthouse Lane. The old flats have been replaced with a film studio. In the north, there was an old fort which has been demolished for a children's playground. The new playground is located between the community centre, which is
also
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 new for
Pebbleton
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 society, and the lighthouse. Old Fort Road and the old roundabout have
been
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preserved their futures. The number of houses
have
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has
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 been increased in the north.
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, the green environment has been protected over time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pebbleton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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