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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work , job satisfaction is an important element of individuals wellbeing What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Nowadays, many
people
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 spend most of their
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life time
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 working .
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, their moods will be
effected
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 significantly
through
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 whatever they feel during their career hours . It is essential to have job
fulfillment
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. Several factors can cause satisfaction
such
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 as enough
earning
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earnings
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 and
individual's
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an individual's
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 potential interest
to
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 their
work
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 . Despite these , some
people
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 may not feel the same owing to
lack
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 of
purposes
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purpose
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. Well-paid jobs
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people
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's
interest
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interests
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 make workers feel more pleasure at
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work place
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workplace
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. Getting enough money will allow individuals to enjoy their
life
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 and achieve what they wish to have .
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 financial ability may rise the
fulfillment
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sence
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sense
 no matter what difficulties they occupied .
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, doing dreamy jobs or the ones a person
desire
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 the most will bring up
fortunate
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the fortunate
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. If they love their occupation , their
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work's
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 stress level will decline through the years. It may
relief
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 them and cause permanent satisfaction.
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,
due to
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 the fact that all
people
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 may not have similar standards for selecting a
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life time
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lifetime
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 occupation , some of them may suffer from dissatisfaction. The businesses will be
filed
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filled
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 with men and women with various traits
as well as
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 favours . Some may decide to
to
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work
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on
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in
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 that field because of their family's insistence or lack of job opportunities
on
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in
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 their beloved career . As a
consequent
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consequence
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, it is possible for some individuals not to gain enough
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 in the majority of their adult
life
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 since they do not have
appropriate
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goal
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goals
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 for attending one career . To sum it up , earning
efficient
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an efficient
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 salary will contribute to satisfaction
as well as
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 working in
amusement
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 circumstances . In spite of these , some may struggle with unfulfilling
life
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 during their
work
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 hours.
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