The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates
the
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all process of making soft cheese briefly. The main five steps of production are mixing, cooling, fermentation, evaporation, and cooling.
Overall
the
hole
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process requires nearly 24
hours
, additional ingredients, heating ,and mixing devices.
Firstly
water and milk
blended
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together in the mixer. After the mixing stage,
occured
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occurred
mixture would send into the cooling chamber for 2
hours
at 5 degrees. The mixture completes all these
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with
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its liquid form. Before the fermentation step,
operator
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have
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to add salt
to begin
the activity of fermentation.
This
phase requires a heat resource for
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2
hours
. At
this
stage
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all mixture
change
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its form. The
last
two steps are longer than the other phases.
Temperature
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reaches
to
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100 degrees in the evaporation stage. Evaporated water molecules went out as steam
directy
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directly
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outside
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of the system. Eventually thick liquid is ready to
condansate
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condensate
with cooling in the
last
chamber. The cooling phase provides filtering
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final compound during 8
hours
of resting at 5 degrees. After by-products
removed
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are removed
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from soft
cheese
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it is ready for
consuming
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as soft cheese.
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