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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph
give
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 that data about different countries of residence of
oversease
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overseas
students
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 in make comparisons where relevant.There are four countries.They are
Indonesia
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,
Hong
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kong
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Kong
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 Malaysia and Singapore. Looking at the graph as a whole,four countries
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siginificant
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significant
 movement up and down.
In
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Indonesia
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 was the most
proportion
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 of
residence
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 of overseas
students
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 in Australia. In detail, in 1982, the
proportion
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 of overseas
students
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 in Australia is
largest
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the largest
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in
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of
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four
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the four
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countires
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countries
counties
, after 8 years that the rate of
students
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 in
Hong
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Kong
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 is the largest. The
proportion
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 of
students
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of
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in
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Hong
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Kong
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 slow decrease until 1986,
then
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sudden
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a
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apply
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rise in 1988
while
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 in
Hong
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Kong
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 over the
proportion
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 in
Indonesia
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. In
adition
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addition
,
students
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of
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in
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Hong
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Kong
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remaind
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remained
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all
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 most
constaint
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constant
constraint
 at around 10 between 1990 and 1996.
Morover
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Moreover
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students
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 of
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Indonesia
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in Indonesia
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more
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was more
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 than 10 from 1994 to 2000.in
aditon
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addition
, the
proportion
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 of
student
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students
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 in Malaysia and
Singapore
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Singapore's
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 insignificant movement go up,
then
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 in 2000,they rise more than1982.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, indonesia, hong, kong, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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