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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a strong argument that every youngster should have a right to be admitted to higher
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 irrespective of their academic ability. In my opinion,
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 I understand
education
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 should be accessible to everyone equally, I disagree with
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 argument. I will cover my reasons in
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Firstly
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, it is important for
students
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 to feel comfortable and keep
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 for learning. If all schools are available for everyone,
students
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'
levels
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 would vary and some
students
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, who can not follow the speed of lessons, might feel left behind
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 others. These people may end up giving up on learning or dropping out
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of
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 school.
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, if foreign
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, who do not have sufficient English proficiency,
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 in a college program, they will highly likely have difficulty understanding the content of the lessons.
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, when it comes to teamwork assignments, it is hard for
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 to cooperate with each other
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 the different
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levels
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.
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, superior
students
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 need to do most of the assignments by themselves, which adds an extra burden on them.
This
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 circumstance is not fair.
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, when a group consisting of a variety of English
levels
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 needs to make a presentation,
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students
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 need to take a lead and do more work to get a better grade.
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, I disagree with the opinion that
university
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universities
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 or
college
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colleges
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 should allow admission without a minimum level of
education
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. If
students
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 have different
levels
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, some may give up and quit school. Teamwork between
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 will
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 cause
additional
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burden
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 on more advanced
students
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.
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, I believe that the minimum level of
education
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 for admission actually benefits
students
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 as a whole.
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