Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?

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There are many social networking platforms that are being emerged in the past few years and out of them Instagram,

Facebook

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and Facebook

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tops

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the list, but still

majority

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the majority

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of people

believes

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believe

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that these websites are creating a negative impact on society.

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there are both advantages and disadvantages to

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statement, I partially disagree

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this

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and have examples to support it.

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, on the positive

side

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these websites are creating a huge

employement

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employment

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rate around the world, and there are many millions

who's

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whose

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livelihood is based on social media.

A statistics

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Statistics

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in one of the most

renowed

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renowned

newspaper

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depicted that there were around 15 million people who were employed directly and

also

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indirectly with Instagram,

facebook

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Facebook

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and

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combinedly in the year 2022 and

this

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graph is only for India. It has

also

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became

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a tool to

show case

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showcase

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the inner talents of a person with the help of all the fun activities present within the app and

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citizens are being more creative by posting not just new but

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weird stuff

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there. Now, on the downhill side, youth

especially from 10-20 years of age

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, especially from 10-20 years of age,

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were being very

addictive

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addicted

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to these apps, and neglecting every single thing in life to become successful by sticking to their mobiles and buffering these sites as if

its

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it's

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their whole world. A local television channel from

hyderabad

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Hyderabad

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posted the devastating success rate in recent competitive exams and after analysing them, the experts concluded that students are neglecting their studies and

instead

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posting

vidoes

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videos

online as thinking as if

its

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it's

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their means of income. To

conlude

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conclude

, as technology is advancing many public communication tools became famous and

due to

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which

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this

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there is

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a depicit

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depicit

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deficit

unemployement

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unemployment

which not only boosts the country's revenue but

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helps

individual

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individuals

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to live a peaceful life, But

on the other hand

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anything which is overuse will eventually

becomes

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into poison and

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is the best example. I believe there are many ways by which we can use these sites for our own good and one has to choose wisely

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he may end up being broken.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

347 words

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media consumption
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Fully explain your ideas

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