Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?
There are many social networking platforms that are being emerged in the past few years and out of them Instagram,
Facebook
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and Facebook
tops
the list, but still Wrong verb form
top
majority
of people Add an article
the majority
a majority
believes
that these websites are creating a negative impact on society. Correct subject-verb agreement
believe
Although
there are both advantages and disadvantages to this
statement, I partially disagree to
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with
this
and have examples to support it.
Firstly
, on the positive side
these websites are creating a huge Add a comma
,side
employement
rate around the world, and there are many millions Correct your spelling
employment
unemployment
who's
livelihood is based on social media. Correct your spelling
whose
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in one of the most Correct article usage
Statistics
renowed
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renowned
newspaper
depicted that there were around 15 million people who were employed directly and Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
also
indirectly with Instagram,facebook
and Change the capitalization
Facebook
whatsapp
combinedly in the year 2022 and Correct your spelling
WhatsApp
this
graph is only for India. It has also
became
a tool to Change the verb form
become
show case
the inner talents of a person with the help of all the fun activities present within the app and Correct your spelling
showcase
also
citizens are being more creative by posting not just new but also
weird stuff in
there.
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especially from 10-20 years of age
were being very Add the comma(s)
, especially from 10-20 years of age,
addictive
to these apps, and neglecting every single thing in life to become successful by sticking to their mobiles and buffering these sites as if Replace the word
addicted
its
their whole world. A local television channel from Replace the word
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it is
hyderabad
posted the devastating success rate in recent competitive exams and after analysing them, the experts concluded that students are neglecting their studies and Change the capitalization
Hyderabad
instead
posting vidoes
online as thinking as if Correct your spelling
videos
its
their means of income.
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it's
it is
conlude
, as technology is advancing many public communication tools became famous and Correct your spelling
conclude
due to
which
there is Correct pronoun usage
this
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a depicit
depicit
of Correct your spelling
deficit
unemployement
which not only boosts the country's revenue but Correct your spelling
unemployment
also
helps individual
to live a peaceful life, But Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
on the other hand
anything which is overuse will eventually becomes
into poison and Change the verb form
become
this
is the best example. I believe there are many ways by which we can use these sites for our own good and one has to choose wisely otherwise
he may end up being broken.Submitted by sumanthreddy666111 on
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