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Today’s teenagers struggles with many social issues. Some people think that this is because their parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to
 the busy work schedules of
parents
, they are unable to spend quality
time
 with their
children
 which
have
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 impacted their behaviour in dealing with social difficulties. In my opinion, I disagree and I shall discuss my views in the following paragraphs. Nowadays
children
 are more isolated than ever because of technology and they tend to spend more
time
 indoors rather than outdoors.
This
 is one of the main reasons why
children
 lack social
skills
 and
parents
 do play a role in encouraging them to build and enhance their social
skills
.
However
,
parents
 do play a vital role in shaping the
child
's future and
while
 sending them to school which is a place for social development
due to
 various reasons they refrain from interacting with others depending on the
child
's personality.
While
children
 are comfortable socializing at home as family members are no strangers to them,
this
 behaviour is not the same when a
child
 is sent to school. As kids spend more
time
 at school,
parents
 are unaware of their behavioural patterns and it is the teachers who should curate activities which could help the
child
 build their
skills
.
For instance
, working on group projects will help
children
 to adapt to the environment and interact with other students
while
 developing friendly relationships.
To conclude
,
children
 spend most of their
time
 outside their homes and exposure to the outside world will help them handle situations better sending
children
 to different class activities will help in the development of social
skills
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parental guidance
  • Supervision
  • Neglect
  • Peer pressure
  • Quality time
  • Unhealthy attention-seeking
  • Online safety
  • Support systems
  • Community programs
  • Independent problem-solving
  • Family dynamics
  • Emotional well-being
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