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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today, canned
foods
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 have increased and ultimately displace traditional
foods
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 and old models of
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 provision. It seems to me that modern lives in many developing countries lead to an increase of consumption fast
foods
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instead
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 of traditional
foods
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. I will explain why in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, canned
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 replace traditional
foods
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, because of the lower prices. Since convenience
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 provide in the factories. their ingredient is cheaper than buying ingredient traditional
foods
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.
For instance
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, canned fish prepare lower price and faster than cooking fish at home. One of the other significant factors is
time
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. Because many people work more
time
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 during the day in progressive communities.
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, they do not have enough
time
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 to cook, when they come back home.
Therefore
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, they prefer to provide fast
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instead
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 of traditional
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.
Finally
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, canned
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 have interesting boxes.
On the other hand
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, they have been designed beautifully in the factories which makes them more attractive for people to consume which leads to buying them more than spending
time
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 cooking homemade
food
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. It is true that traditional
food
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 is more delicious and healthier than
convenience
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conventional
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foods
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, and they provide easily. Despite
this
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, traditional
foods
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 are better but more humans do not have
time
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 for home
foods
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 since they prefer to provide canned
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 easily and spend more
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 on their other routine activities.
To conclude
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, canned
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 make lower prices and require less
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 for preparing, but traditional
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 need more
time
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 to produce and make a higher price so communities will inevitably cline to consume them more and more.
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