Some people think that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it is important to keep working life completely seperate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
it is sometimes thought that it is a better way to do some social activity with
office's
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coworkers at
weekends
and after
company's
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hour
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, other
people
believe that it is vital to
seperate
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separate
working and social
life
. In my opinion, I consider that socialization with peers helps
people
learn more about
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and
social
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activities
. On the one hand, some
people
think that helping in social
works
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with coworkers is really a nice thought and I agree. The reason why I agree
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statement is that workers will know each other feelings for
social
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life
even after
company's
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the company's
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hour
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.
This
might
be increase
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their bonding with each other, and
this
bonding will help in the company's work.
Moreover
, those adults who spend time
to do
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some social
activities
at
weekends
will helpful for society in any
hazard
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situations
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situation
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.
For instance
, a group of adults who always do social
activities
like helping other poor
people
and like that. They have always references
of
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all fields and might be helpful for
the
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society.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better to
sepreate
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separate
working
life
from social
life
. Some
people
think that they
working
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work
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with
people
which are different in
religious
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.
Therefore
, they can not share
there
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time with them to do
such
kind
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of social
activities
.
Additionally
, some
people
have
some
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busy schedule or
to
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do some business at
weekends
for earning extra money.
For instance
, some
people
are doing
part time
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jobs at
weekends
to complete their goals. In conclusion,
while
people
may vary in their opinions between choosing
working
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with colleagues for social
life
or not, I think that adults stand a better chance to know their coworkers and current social issues and how to solve them together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • supportive work environment
  • personal growth
  • diverse perspectives
  • conflicts of interest
  • professional boundaries
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • innovation
  • collaborative projects
  • hierarchy
  • authority
  • nuanced decision
  • social and cultural expectations
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