The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
This
pie chart describes the average of spending funds in certain Asias which are Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
Overall
,Japan seemed to have almost balanced percentages in Housing, Transport, food and Other goods and services, there was only a noticeably had got low score in
Health
care
. Let's start with Other goods and services which had 29% of the most popular sections in the household.
Next,
food got 24%, Housing which had had 21%, Transport 20%, and
lastly
6% for
Health
care
.
On the other hand
in Malaysia, there was more unevenness within the departments, which is 34% for Housing, followed by 27% for Food and Other goods and services goes by a slightly low 26%.
In addition
, Transport got a ratio of 10% and only 3% for
Health
care
.
To sum up
, Japan was more even amongst departments than Malaysia in 2010.
Although
there
was
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between those countries that
Health
care
was the lowest number of all.
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