The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the number of
shops
that shut down in comparison with newly opened businesses in one country between 2011-2018. The two lines showcase the total amounts of
closures
and
openings
in absolute numbers in correlation with time, here 7 years. Largely, there has been an
overall
downward trend in both graphs with a significant dip
of
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closed
shops
in 2015. Unfortunately, after that numbers rose again and in 2018 more
shops
closed than new ones opened. In 2011 about 6500 businesses had to foreclose.
This
is counteracted by the highest number of 8500 new
shops
emerging that year. Both saw a downward trend, after that with new ones showing a steeper decline. They rose quite sharply between 2012 and 2013 with
closures
peaking in 2013 and
openings
rising till 2014. Yet again both trends have parallel declines. As mentioned,
closures
plummeted in 2015 to a low of 500,
whereas
openings
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lowest point was an absolute of 4000.
Bankrupsies
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Bankruptcies
soared again in 2016 with 5100 and stayed steady
thereafter
.
Openings
levelled earlier and had a marked decrease to 3000 in 2018. Businesses opened and closed more or less in a parallel format.
However
, the distinct drop in
closures
in 2015 is a noteworthy point in time.
Overall
, the reverse happened during a
seven year
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period: more
shops
were forced to shut down than new ones opened.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, closures, openings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Fluctuation
  • Shop closures
  • Retail openings
  • Economic conditions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Local economy
  • Business dynamics
  • Commercial landscape
  • Statistical comparison
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Consumer trends
  • Market forces
  • Business cycle
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