The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph displays the number of

shops

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that shut down in comparison with newly opened businesses in one country between 2011-2018. The two lines showcase the total amounts of

closures

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and

openings

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in absolute numbers in correlation with time, here 7 years. Largely, there has been an

overall

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downward trend in both graphs with a significant dip

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closed

shops

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in 2015. Unfortunately, after that numbers rose again and in 2018 more

shops

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closed than new ones opened. In 2011 about 6500 businesses had to foreclose.

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is counteracted by the highest number of 8500 new

shops

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emerging that year. Both saw a downward trend, after that with new ones showing a steeper decline. They rose quite sharply between 2012 and 2013 with

closures

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peaking in 2013 and

openings

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rising till 2014. Yet again both trends have parallel declines. As mentioned,

closures

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plummeted in 2015 to a low of 500,

whereas

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openings

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lowest point was an absolute of 4000.

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soared again in 2016 with 5100 and stayed steady

thereafter

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Openings

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levelled earlier and had a marked decrease to 3000 in 2018. Businesses opened and closed more or less in a parallel format.

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, the distinct drop in

closures

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in 2015 is a noteworthy point in time.

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, the reverse happened during a

seven year

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period: more

shops

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were forced to shut down than new ones opened.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, closures, openings with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

228 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Trend analysis
Fluctuation
Shop closures
Retail openings
Economic conditions
Consumer behavior
Local economy
Business dynamics
Commercial landscape
Statistical comparison
Significant increase/decrease
Year-on-year comparison
Consumer trends
Market forces
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