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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.
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The two pictorial diagrams give information about one city called Frenton and how
this
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 city changed after reconstruction between 1990-2012.
Overal
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, there have been significant changes in the Frenton. It is
also
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 clear that
a
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apply
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major changes have included flats, technopark,
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
school
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schools
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. Several buildings are replaced by modern buildings.
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, in 1990 there was a bank
on
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the
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apply
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opposite
of
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the school and it is altered
to
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into
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the
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a
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 restaurant with very unique and delicious meals.
Furthermore
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, there was
cafe
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a cafe
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 and park on the right side of
high
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the high
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 street and in 2012 they were altered into
course
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the course
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 of
goal
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goals
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 and
hotel
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a hotel
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.
Moreover
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,
old
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the old
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theater
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theatre
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 was replaced with very modern cinema. The shops
on
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at
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 the bottom of the map were replaced by
moder
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modern
supermarket
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supermarkets
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. The
playin
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playin'
playing
 fields with trees and hoses were demolished and altered into blocks of flats. Remarkably, by now even though a lot of changes have been carried out there, the school and library stayed unchanged.
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, the hospital which is located just above
a
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 library was enlarged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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