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Computer and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraging as it is good for both empoyers and workers. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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Nowadays,
amount
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the amount
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 of
work
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, that made at the distance from the
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work place
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workplace
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are
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is
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 increasing amazingly.
This
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 trend
make
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makes
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 sense
,
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apply
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 because
from
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,from
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 the appearance of
Internet
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the Internet
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, it became easy to
made
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make
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 everything at
home
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. Most of them are IT
works
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workers
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:
Designer
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designers
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, data
scientist
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scientists
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, game
developer
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developers
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, and
other
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others
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ones
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apply
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.
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, does
this
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 good? Let's talk about that. I think
,
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apply
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that is
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 good, because when you
work
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 at
home
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 - you
work
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 better. Yeah, of course, at
home
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 you don't want to
work
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,
however
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, everything that you need
are
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is
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at
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in
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 your hand.
For example
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, if you need paper to write something,
pen
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a pen
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to
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for
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this
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 action, or if you need
new
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a new
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 mouse,
keyboard
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or keyboard
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 you can find or buy it without any problem. Because you know where are every shop, what they sell, or where were located every single object in your house.
Also
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, at
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home
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,home
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 you can
work
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 anytime you want. To be honest, if you
work
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, you don't
work
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 every single second at
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work place
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workplace
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, sometime you just chill, another
time
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 you
work
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, and that cycle repeats. At
home
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, you wait until
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work
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the work
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 list became amazingly big, and when
this
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fill
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fills
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 up - you start to
work
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. Yeah, you can get tired from
amount
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the amount
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 of
work
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, that you must
to
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apply
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work
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, but on the other side, you play hardcore
videogames
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video games
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, walk around the city, watch the cinema, and other
such
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 things, that need a lot of
time
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.
At
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In
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conclusion
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the conclusion
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, I think, that working at
home
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 is
very
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a very
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 good option in near future. Because, when you
work
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 at
home
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 you can manage your
time
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 very efficiently. You can control
time
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, so watching
cinema
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the cinema
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,
play
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playing
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 something or other hard hobbies became possible, and of course, if you made all
work
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 at one
time
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 it became much
more easy
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easier
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 to take
overview
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an overview
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,
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apply
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 because you know what you wrote.
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