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Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. Discuss the effects lack of experience with and understanding of nature can have on children as they grow up. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a strong argument that
while
 our life has gotten busier than before, many young people tend to stay indoors and they do not have enough time in
nature
, which leads to negative impacts on their growth. I will cover the effects
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this
 circumstance in
this
 essay. First of all, a lack of opportunities to bring youngsters to wildlife environments may cause a lack of understanding of global issues, including endangered species and deforestation. These issues require more awareness from society, especially minors who need to take a lead in the future to make the situation better. If the importance of natural ecosystems is not comprehended by
chidren
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children
, more and more endangered species will likely
to
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be reported and eventually
the
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 numerous
number of
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species will be extinguished from the Earth.
Secondly
, experience with
nature
 brings about huge positive influences on teenagers. There is evidence that getting fresh air in
nature
 can improve the quality of
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 and reduce stress
level
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. In modern days, mental diseases have become serious problems.
Therefore
, some measures to deal with their stress are indispensable and outdoor exercise,
such
 as hiking and cycling, would be
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.
However
, if children do not know the value of
nature
, they will prefer staying home rather than
exposuring
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exposing
 themselves to the natural environment.
To conclude
,
modern
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 busy
life style
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lifestyle
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 has reduced
oppotunities
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opportunities
of
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 experience
with
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nature
 for
chidren
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children
, which leads to drawbacks as they grow up. I believe that children should learn the value of
nature
 and global issues
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to avoid these drawbacks.
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