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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some nation argues that advertisings have a powerful
effect
 on
people
 and what it is they want to buy. Some other nations believe that advertising are being a lot and it can not any
effect
 on their decision so they buy
things
 which
things
 which they need. In my opinion, advertising has some positive and negative points and
people
 who see them should think about it and choose useful advertising. On the one hand, some communicators argue that advertisements pressure them to buy that thing. It has some reasons.
Firstly
, Sometimes children are seeing advertising and pressure on their parents that buy
things
.
Secondly
, sometimes advertising are showing lying pictures and saying unreal information to encourage
people
 to buy it so
people
 believe their information .
For example
,
people
 believe that Spaghetti what it was in advertising has good flavour and buy it, but in ,fact Spaghetti has poor quality.
Finally
, some advertising is very interesting and
people
 receive positive effects from it and they want to have it.
On the other hand
, some other nations believe that there are a lot of advertisements anywhere and they
don’t
 attention to them. So they buy something that they think is useful.
For example
, when
people
 have experience with the quality of something, they
don’t
 receive the
effect
 of advertising. They buy
things
 which think they need. I think that
people
 should think about advertising and
don’t
 take emotional decisions. In conclusion, some
people
 have argued that advertising has positive effects on something that they buy and some other believe that the numbers of advertisements are high and they do have not any
effect
 on them. In my opinion,
people
 should think about their needs and
don’t
 buy
things
 that they do not need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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