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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some nation argues that advertisings have a powerful
effect
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 on
people
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 and what it is they want to buy. Some other nations believe that advertising are being a lot and it can not any
effect
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 on their decision so they buy
things
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 which
things
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 which they need. In my opinion, advertising has some positive and negative points and
people
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 who see them should think about it and choose useful advertising. On the one hand, some communicators argue that advertisements pressure them to buy that thing. It has some reasons.
Firstly
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, Sometimes children are seeing advertising and pressure on their parents that buy
things
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.
Secondly
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, sometimes advertising are showing lying pictures and saying unreal information to encourage
people
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 to buy it so
people
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 believe their information .
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,
people
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 believe that Spaghetti what it was in advertising has good flavour and buy it, but in ,fact Spaghetti has poor quality.
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, some advertising is very interesting and
people
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 receive positive effects from it and they want to have it.
On the other hand
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, some other nations believe that there are a lot of advertisements anywhere and they
don’t
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 attention to them. So they buy something that they think is useful.
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, when
people
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 have experience with the quality of something, they
don’t
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 receive the
effect
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 of advertising. They buy
things
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 which think they need. I think that
people
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 should think about advertising and
don’t
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 take emotional decisions. In conclusion, some
people
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 have argued that advertising has positive effects on something that they buy and some other believe that the numbers of advertisements are high and they do have not any
effect
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 on them. In my opinion,
people
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 should think about their needs and
don’t
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 buy
things
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 that they do not need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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