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The values learned from parents and family have a grater influence on the future success than the knowledge and skills learned from the school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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 knowledge gained at home with family
members
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 has a greater impact than the things we were taught at
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. In my opinion, both family
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 and teachers have a greater influence on
children
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 which helps them in shaping their
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, and in the following paragraphs, I put forth my views.
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, parents play an important role as they raise them and condition them till they go to
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 the home is the first place where
children
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 learn,
school
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 comes secondary. The
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 is exposed to various knowledge where
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learns from the family
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,
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 they are sent to
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 or pre-nursery. As the
child
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 grows up, they tend to understand the ways of the world better and get acquainted with everyone around them. Over the years,
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 get educated and as they grow up they form opinions and ideas.
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, parents still play a role in guiding
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, as it is a prime age when a
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 could get distracted and end up on the wrong path.
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 teachers educate them and encourage them with their bright ideas, family
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 are the supporting backbone in shaping the
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's
future
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. Having a great relationship with their
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 is an important factor.
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, when
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 are in their teens, the companies they keep influence them, and
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 parents need to be aware of the
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's whereabouts.
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 in my opinion family
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 and teachers are the backbone
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 shaping the
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's
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, and ,certainly their guidance in every aspect of life is very important.
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, in my opinion, both play a vital role in shaping the
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's
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