Many scientists are concerned about global warming. Research shows that the worldwide increase in temperature is getting worse. Furthermore, global warming seems to be related to levels of pollution in the atmosphere. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem.
Global heating is what a lot of scientists are worried about.Study says that the global temperature rise is becoming bad.
Moreover
, the increasing heat of our planet seems to be dependent on how polluted it is. In my opinion, the reason for global warming is the high pollution level.The polluted place produces gases that do not let reflected light from the earth go to space, and the world getting warm.
Another cause of the world warming is the way people live. People every day go to work with cars and buses that emit harmful gases.Drinking coffee with disposable cups.Additionally
, they do not sort trash and send it to recycling.Using coal to produce electricity releases dangerous gasses.It also
increases increases level of pollution related to global heating.
I think that we can solve all of these problems by changing our way of life.If all people electrical transport which does not pollute the air.Furthermore
, if all humans sort trash and reuse it by recycling we can decrease the pollution on our planet.In addition
, we should use clean sources of energy such
as the sun, wind and water.According to
the statistics, these actions will stop the heating of the world.
In conclusion, we discussed that global warming is not only nature's problem it is the problem of humanity and our planet.We should not apply things that can harm nature in daily life. And we should utilize filters to decrease producing dangerous gases.I believe that we can solve this
and other problems together.Submitted by bekab1515 on
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task achievement
Make sure to maintain a consistent tone and formal style throughout the essay. This includes avoiding informal words and phrases such as 'global heating' and 'bad'. Consider using 'global warming' and 'severe' instead.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea. Try to expand on the causes and solutions more elaborately with specific examples and detailed explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Work on your transitions between sentences and ideas to maintain the flow more smoothly. Use linking words and phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' and 'Therefore,' more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and sentence structure to ensure clarity. For example, 'If all people electrical transport which does not pollute the air.' can be improved to 'If all people used electric transport that does not pollute the air.'
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt and covers both causes of global warming and potential solutions, which demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay, providing a clear starting and closing point for your discussion.
task achievement
You have shown a good effort in presenting clear and comprehensive ideas. This makes your essay coherent and understandable despite some minor grammatical mistakes.
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